This post, like every previous post in this newsletter, is insightful and important. Maybe "smart on crime" would be a better moniker for effective policies.
I'm an 80 year-old retire lawyer. I've been writing seriously since college.
1. This is too long. You don't need to write a senior thesis. You have a tendency to be repetitive. There are intelligent people following you. Intelligent people do a lot of reading. Their time is also valuable.
2. I get angry when you use "caging." It is decidedly hyperbolic and pejorative rhetoric. Words matter. Cages are for animals. Using this word does not help your cause. It defines you as sardonic. Stay professional; use "jailing" or "incarcerating." Don't let your own frustration bleed through in your writing.
This post, like every previous post in this newsletter, is insightful and important. Maybe "smart on crime" would be a better moniker for effective policies.
I'm an 80 year-old retire lawyer. I've been writing seriously since college.
1. This is too long. You don't need to write a senior thesis. You have a tendency to be repetitive. There are intelligent people following you. Intelligent people do a lot of reading. Their time is also valuable.
2. I get angry when you use "caging." It is decidedly hyperbolic and pejorative rhetoric. Words matter. Cages are for animals. Using this word does not help your cause. It defines you as sardonic. Stay professional; use "jailing" or "incarcerating." Don't let your own frustration bleed through in your writing.
3. Keep up the good work!
Verb. sap.